I do a lot of coverage of screenplays these days. I see a lot of common mistakes.
The following are a series of concise screenwriting tips.
#3 WRITE WITH PRODUCTION IN MIND
When you start out as a writer you'll often hear others say - "Don't think about restrictions - just write as it comes to you - don't create any boundaries - just write and let it flow."
While this is good advice to a certain degree - especially for those writers who have trouble putting words on the page - there ultimately comes a time when you have to think about your market.
While screenwriting is at its heart is a creative pursuit - ultimately - you are like any other business (assuming you want to do this for money - for those not wanting to make money out of screenwriting - disregard this post - for the rest - read on...).
Think of the car industry - it's all well and good for a car designer to be told to design the most amazing car they can with no restrictions.
What's the end result? You end up with a state-of-the-art car that costs about $10m to make.
Now let's go and look at the car market.
Oh, shit - there's a really small about of people out there willing to spend $10m on a car.
In the car marketplace - the main sales go from around the $10k mark up to $100k.
That's the sweet spot - that's where most car owners are happy to buy a car.
The same needs to be done for your film.
There are only a handful of production studios that can make a $200m film. We're talking less than 10 worldwide.
These companies typically develop these $200m films internally.
Jump down a notch to the $100m film category - sure, there's a handful more production companies that can raise this kind of cash - but again - because of the amount of money at risk - they're only going to want to work with creatives who have a proven track-record of delivering quality product on budget.
So unless you have a slew of great credits - writing for this price-point is a waste of time.
Jump down to the $50m mark - again - there are more production companies who can raise this kind of money - but again - $50m is a lot of money - so again, these producers aren't going to risk it on (essentially) unknown creatives.
Jump down to the $20m mark - yes, there's a lot of production companies that can raise this capital to make a film - but again - $20m is a lot of cash to risk on unknowns.
Jump down again - to the $15m price point.
More production companies - and here you will see some 'little knowns' getting their break - but these are still few and far between.
It's not until you jump down to the $5m category that you start to see more 'first-time directors/writers breaking in.'
But even here - they want SOME kind of track record - a short film that did well - a feature script that won a major script comp - or made it onto the Black/Hit/Blood/Brit list.
It's really at the $500k - $3m range where you see most of 'new creatives' getting their break-through.
So with that in mind - if you have little or no IMDB credits to your name - and you don't have really good representation - then this is where you should write your screenplays for.
If you can come up with a high concept feature film that is set in 4 or less locations with a cast of less than 6 you have an immensely better chance of getting your film made than if you've written the next Titanic.
Think about that for a while...
So that's MACRO film budget.
Let's talk scene level film budget...
What do you mean by that?
How you write each scene can have a major effect on the budget of your film.
I recently reviewed a script with a gorilla in the scene. Then I thought - how damn expensive would it be to get a gorilla for that scene?
Where the hell would you start?
Then I looked at the scene - the gorilla was not central to the scene. The gorilla was window dressing. Sure, it made the scene better, but the core of the scene didn't change if you removed the gorilla.
The scene was set in a forest.
A forest is quite possibly one of the cheapest places to shoot a scene.
There's no set dressing. No lighting (assuming you're shooting at day.)
You really only need minimal crew and your cast.
So, with that gorilla scene in mind - the moment the writer removed the gorilla from the scene - the shot went from a $20k day - to a $2k day. That's a rough estimate - obviously - but you get the idea.
Securing large public locations can be costly.
Shooting a scene in LAX will cost you an arm and a leg.
Think about that important meeting you have between two characters that happens at arrivals in LAX.
Is there any reason why you couldn't have the meet take place in the BATHROOM at LAX.
That way - all you need to get is an establishing shot of LAX - that won't cost very much at all.
Then you can go to ANY BATHROOM in ANY BUILDING and shoot the bathroom meet between your two main characters. Have some audio effects of flight calls being announced on PA speakers and you've sold the moment - simultaneously you've reduced your budget dramatically.
The same goes for scenes that take place in sports stadiums.
Is it imperative that the scene is shot in the stands at a packed football match?
OR...
Could you have a scene-setting shot of the football field - a drone shot perhaps - something you could buy from stock footage for a couple of hundred dollars.
Then the important scene - the important moment - that was going to happen in the stands surrounded by thousands of people - could take place inside - say in a cafe - or a bar - or any location that's small and doesn't require paying one thousand extras.
A really good test is to go through your screenplay - look at each scene - think about what the core of the scene is - ask yourself, what are you trying to do with that scene?
Once you know what the core of your scene is - think about alternate locations and ways to execute that beat.
You'll find that almost every scene can be executed in a far less expensive way.
Cost of production is something that any producer that's worth their salt considers as they read scripts.
If a producer knows that they can get a film made for $2m - then they're going to pass on any script that doesn't meet that budget - regardless of if the film is a great script or not.
Tuesday, 1 November 2016
Sunday, 30 October 2016
SCREENWRITING FUNDAMENTALS #2 MONTAGES
I do a lot of coverage of screenplays these days. I see a lot of common mistakes.
The following are a series of concise screenwriting tips.
#2 MONTAGES
Montages serve two main functions.
They show a long passage of time in a short period of time.
They can either focus on one main character - or they can follow a series of characters.
There really is no rule.
The main thing to make sure that's happening in a montage is that there is a progression of events - that the story is being moved forward.
If you're focusing on one main character in your montage - then you want to show that character growing and learning - at the start of the montage they are unable to do, or are bad at doing something - by the end of the montage they have grown better at doing that certain something - quite often having mastered it.
There is another way to use a montage WITHOUT moving the story forward - this is when you use a montage to put forward your theme.
Just say your theme is the devastation of mining on the environment - you could have a montage of shots showing various mines around the world that have destroyed the environment.
In this montage the story has not been moved forward - but you have put forth your thesis - it's kind of like the writer or director or producer saying - this is what this story will be about.
In screenwriting it is important to SHOW not TELL.
Using a montage in this way is a much more effective way of conveying your theme, than having a character TALKING about the devastation of mining.
Hearing someone talk about something is only half as effective as seeing that same thing.
WRITING A MONTAGE
If your script is only going to have one montage in it - then you don't need to label your montage.
Simply write
MONTAGE --
Then use a dash, or a double dash, and write how you'd like each scene to go. You don't need to write traditional slug lines in a montage. It slows down the read. It's okay to write locations in long form - as such...
- Football field - Day - Mike throws the ball. It falls short. His arm is still hurting badly from his injury. He gives up. Walks off the field.
- Gym - Day - Mike works with light weights. His face pained, his arm hurting badly. He gives up.
- Physio center - Day - Mike struggles with physio exercises.
- Football Field - Spectators stands - night - Mike watches his team lose a game. Anger and determination fills his face.
Now that you've setup the four major locations - you cycle back through those same locations showing a progression each time you revisit them.
- Football Field - Day - Mike throws the football. It falls short. His arm still hurting. But this time he walks to the ball, picks it up, throws it again. He's not going to give up.
- Gym - day - Mike works with light weights. It hurts, but he's determined to push through.
- Physio center - Day - Mike powers through his exercises. It hurts, but he's determined to do this.
Football Field - spectators stand - night - Mike watches his team play a hard game, but they lost by one point.
We then cycle through the locations two more times.
The third time Mike has made more progression, the fourth time he is almost as good as new.
When you've finished writing the montage you write...
END MONTAGE.
If you have multiple montages throughout your script it's a good idea to label them.
I.E...
MIKE'S TRAINING MONTAGE.
MIKE'S STUDYING MONTAGE.
MIKE'S TRAVELLING MONTAGE.
Etc...
The main reason for this is clarity.
It's important to note that when a 'Reader' reads your script, at best they're going to read about 70% of it. You'll be lucky if they read that much. Odds are, that they'll speed read, which means that they'll read just enough to understand the story and the characters.
The reason for this comes down to just how many scripts there are to be read. If a Reader read every screenplay slowly and throughly, they'd be out of a job very quickly.
With this in mind, it's a good idea to clearly label your montages to avoid any confusion for your reader.
The following are a series of concise screenwriting tips.
#2 MONTAGES
Montages serve two main functions.
They show a long passage of time in a short period of time.
They can either focus on one main character - or they can follow a series of characters.
There really is no rule.
The main thing to make sure that's happening in a montage is that there is a progression of events - that the story is being moved forward.
If you're focusing on one main character in your montage - then you want to show that character growing and learning - at the start of the montage they are unable to do, or are bad at doing something - by the end of the montage they have grown better at doing that certain something - quite often having mastered it.
There is another way to use a montage WITHOUT moving the story forward - this is when you use a montage to put forward your theme.
Just say your theme is the devastation of mining on the environment - you could have a montage of shots showing various mines around the world that have destroyed the environment.
In this montage the story has not been moved forward - but you have put forth your thesis - it's kind of like the writer or director or producer saying - this is what this story will be about.
In screenwriting it is important to SHOW not TELL.
Using a montage in this way is a much more effective way of conveying your theme, than having a character TALKING about the devastation of mining.
Hearing someone talk about something is only half as effective as seeing that same thing.
WRITING A MONTAGE
If your script is only going to have one montage in it - then you don't need to label your montage.
Simply write
MONTAGE --
Then use a dash, or a double dash, and write how you'd like each scene to go. You don't need to write traditional slug lines in a montage. It slows down the read. It's okay to write locations in long form - as such...
- Football field - Day - Mike throws the ball. It falls short. His arm is still hurting badly from his injury. He gives up. Walks off the field.
- Gym - Day - Mike works with light weights. His face pained, his arm hurting badly. He gives up.
- Physio center - Day - Mike struggles with physio exercises.
- Football Field - Spectators stands - night - Mike watches his team lose a game. Anger and determination fills his face.
Now that you've setup the four major locations - you cycle back through those same locations showing a progression each time you revisit them.
- Football Field - Day - Mike throws the football. It falls short. His arm still hurting. But this time he walks to the ball, picks it up, throws it again. He's not going to give up.
- Gym - day - Mike works with light weights. It hurts, but he's determined to push through.
- Physio center - Day - Mike powers through his exercises. It hurts, but he's determined to do this.
Football Field - spectators stand - night - Mike watches his team play a hard game, but they lost by one point.
We then cycle through the locations two more times.
The third time Mike has made more progression, the fourth time he is almost as good as new.
When you've finished writing the montage you write...
END MONTAGE.
If you have multiple montages throughout your script it's a good idea to label them.
I.E...
MIKE'S TRAINING MONTAGE.
MIKE'S STUDYING MONTAGE.
MIKE'S TRAVELLING MONTAGE.
Etc...
The main reason for this is clarity.
It's important to note that when a 'Reader' reads your script, at best they're going to read about 70% of it. You'll be lucky if they read that much. Odds are, that they'll speed read, which means that they'll read just enough to understand the story and the characters.
The reason for this comes down to just how many scripts there are to be read. If a Reader read every screenplay slowly and throughly, they'd be out of a job very quickly.
With this in mind, it's a good idea to clearly label your montages to avoid any confusion for your reader.
SCREENWRITING FUNDAMENTALS #1 - WRITING PROGRAM
I do a lot of coverage of screenplays these days. I see a lot of common mistakes.
The following are a series of concise screenwriting tips.
#1 - FONT/WRITING PROGRAM
A lot of writers seem to think that writing a screenplay in anything other than Final Draft is fine.
'You can't tell the difference' - is the main excuse I hear.
No - you're wrong. I can tell the difference. So can professional Managers, Agents, Readers and Producers.
When a reader sees that a script was written in anything but Final Draft - they automatically flag the screenplay as amateur. Then when they see one more red flag, they start to skim read. Give then one or two more red flags and odds are they'll move into super skim-reading mode, then write up a really quick summary that ends with PASS.
A lot of new writers don't seem to understand just how saturated the screenwriting market is.
There are 50,000 screenplays registered at WGAw yearly. On top of that it's safe to say there are another 50,000 scripts written yearly that go unregistered.
So that's 100,000 screenplays written EVERY YEAR.
Then factor in that it can - in some instances - take 10 years to see a script go from page to the screen - in which case your screenplay is competing at any given time, with over 1 million other scripts.
Think about that for a moment.
1
million
screenplays.
That's a lot of screenplays.
If you can't be bothered to make the investment of $200 and get the ONLY piece of software you need to write screenplays professionally, what does that say about you as a writer?
It says that you're not taking it seriously.
When a reader sees that - they check out. And unless your script is incredible - which - odds are it isn't - not by a country mile - then after two pages they've checked out completely - and they're moving onto the next script.
The following are a series of concise screenwriting tips.
#1 - FONT/WRITING PROGRAM
A lot of writers seem to think that writing a screenplay in anything other than Final Draft is fine.
'You can't tell the difference' - is the main excuse I hear.
No - you're wrong. I can tell the difference. So can professional Managers, Agents, Readers and Producers.
When a reader sees that a script was written in anything but Final Draft - they automatically flag the screenplay as amateur. Then when they see one more red flag, they start to skim read. Give then one or two more red flags and odds are they'll move into super skim-reading mode, then write up a really quick summary that ends with PASS.
A lot of new writers don't seem to understand just how saturated the screenwriting market is.
There are 50,000 screenplays registered at WGAw yearly. On top of that it's safe to say there are another 50,000 scripts written yearly that go unregistered.
So that's 100,000 screenplays written EVERY YEAR.
Then factor in that it can - in some instances - take 10 years to see a script go from page to the screen - in which case your screenplay is competing at any given time, with over 1 million other scripts.
Think about that for a moment.
1
million
screenplays.
That's a lot of screenplays.
If you can't be bothered to make the investment of $200 and get the ONLY piece of software you need to write screenplays professionally, what does that say about you as a writer?
It says that you're not taking it seriously.
When a reader sees that - they check out. And unless your script is incredible - which - odds are it isn't - not by a country mile - then after two pages they've checked out completely - and they're moving onto the next script.
Tuesday, 23 August 2016
INTERVIEW - DAN BENAMOR Writer/Director/Producer - PART 2
Today's post is the second part of an interview with Dan Benamor.
Dan is a screenwriter that recently exploded onto the scene with his screenplay Onward, Through The Night.
Onward, was selected as a Tracking Board Recommended script.
For anyone reading this that doesn't know what Tracking Board is - you need to check them out now.
Tracking Board Recommend is the highest accolade any burgeoning screenwriter can get.
As far as fast-tracking careers goes TBR is better than the Nicholl Fellowship.
Dan is a worthy recipient of that accolade.
He is also the writer of a highly polished thriller 'Initiation' out now on VOD on iTunes - and various other VOD platforms.
Here's a link to the film on US iTunes.
Here's a link to the film on Canadian iTunes
Here's a link to buy the film on youtube
Here's a link to the trailer for Initiation on youtube.
You should be able to find it on Amazon, Xbox, Sony PlayStation, Google Play, YouTube (for rental/purchase), and VUDU plus on most cable VOD providers.
DtS: So, after having made your first low budget feature straight out of film school, how did you come to move to LA?
DB: Honestly, it was all because of my buddy Kyle. He would call me every two weeks and say, when are we going? If it wasn't for him pushing me, I probably would have put it off for another year.
DtS: When did you arrive in LA?
DB: 2011.
DtS: Did you know anyone going into LA?
DB: My cousin.
DtS: How do you feel about LA?
DB: It's a great city. It depends on where you live. I lived in Hollywood at first, and that's a very dispiriting place to live. It's like a refugee camp. I've since moved to Burbank, and I love it there.
DtS: How did you get your fist job in the industry? I met you when you were working at NGN.
DB: Yeah, Nasser entertainment, NGN. I started as an intern, just doing coverage. Then I got hired as a development assistant. Then I got promoted, and eventually I was head of development.
DtS: How long did that take?
DB: It was really short. I had a really good rapport with the producers. We're talking maybe 6 months to a year.
DtS: How many films did you do there?
DB: I did thirteen movies in three years. We were pumping them out pretty good.
DtS: You have a very distinct voice in your writing. I talk about voice on the blog, and how it can carry a writer and carry a script. Your voice is very unique. Can you talk about your voice for a moment, how did you create your style?
DB: I was in a weird mental place when I wrote Onward, I had just gotten engaged, and I had left the job as the development exec', but I wasn't properly represented at that stage, I was sort of in this middle ground, and I had seen the money I could make there, and realised that unless I wrote something that changed things significantly for me, I was going to be earning less than I wanted to be.
So I went to this hotel, and I wrote the first draft really quickly and I chose to not second guess any of my decisions. I wrote it with anger, I think. I think that most of the stuff I have written has been done so with some element of anger.
DtS: You have a very noir tone to your writing. You have super short, blunt sentences. Where does that writing style come from?
DB: Part of the reason I left my old job, I had written a script under a pen name, and we got Michelle McLaren interested in it, who did more episodes of Breaking Bad than anyone, before she completely blew-up, she read my script, met with us, and she said that the thing she took away from it the most was the sense of humour.
But that was kinda weird, as it was a violent, noir script. I've noticed that most of my scripts that resonate with people has had a lot of dark humour, which prevents it from being too dark. And I think it's also my own sensibilities.
In Onward, there's a scene where there's this guy who's a torturer, and he has an ice-coffee that he brings with him to each torture session and he had a coaster, cause to me, you see, films that often have these genre elements, tropes, they're not real people.
So I think to myself, he's a real guy, that's his job, he goes to work and tortures people, and so little things and little moments like that end up being really important to me, and I think they're all about voice, they're not about story. I always try to approach it, like, even bad people are still people, they're not cartoon characters.
DtS: Onward is the script that has done things for you.
DB: Yeah, It got me representation, manager, agent, lawyer.
DtS: This has all come from the Tracking Board Recommends?
DB: I've gotta give them a ton of credit. It has made a huge difference for my career.
DtS: How is the process of working with a good production company on this script compared to what you've experienced perviously?
DB: When you're making an independent film it's all about, let's go make the movie. When you're working with a company like Anonymous Content, the bar for the quality of material is really high. They are also, sooooo smart. It forces me to be on my A game.
DtS: Dealing with notes. Have you received notes you don't agree with? And if so, how do you deal with that?
DB: I'm working with people that are incredibly accomplished and so smart -
DtS: So you haven't been hit with a note that you thought - well that's just stupid -
DB: No, definitely not.
DtS: As a writer, getting bad notes from other projects, how did you deal with it?
DB: I think that because I was a development exec, I've seen both sides of the table. So when a producer gives me a note I know that they're not just saying it for fun, that there's a reason behind it. If it's something I disagree with it's a conversation.
I say, well if I do that, then this is what the domino effect of that will be, and this would be my concern, and then it becomes a conversation and we figure it out. I think that having been a development exec has been super helpful with that.
DtS: Initiation, your film that's just come out on VOD. When did you write it?
DB: About three years ago. My cousin had a script, I ended up coming in and co-writing the script with him.
DtS: How was the co-writing process?
DB: We had a really good working experience together. My cousin brought some great things to the table. He thinks outside the box and it was great. His background is more visual than mine, and he brought things up that I would never have thought about.
As writers we tend to think of the internal workings of the script - the elegance of the structure, themes, arcs, metaphors etc, and for me I'm always trying to bring emotion to everything I'm working on, but with my cousin he thinks how all that is going to be conveyed visually, which is something that writers often forget about. For me, it's all about trying to create an emotional connection between the story and the audience.
DtS: Do you go into a screenplay thinking how can I create a vicarious connection between the audience and my script? Or is that something that you feel is second nature to you?
DB: When I sit down to write, I think, if I was going to read this, why would I give a shit? And I try to set the bar on that relatively high.
Unfortunately, I think we are so numb to stories, that now they have to be so intense or otherwise we just don't care. I'm a horrible audience member. I try to watch a movie now and it's often a disaster, if it's not awesome, after 20 minutes, I'm out.
DtS: Back on your writing process. You said you locked yourself in a motel room and wrote Onward, how long was that?
DB: The first draft was three days. Then I did a couple more drafts before I sent it to anyone. Once the script got the recommend and then I got representation, we changed the script significantly before it was sent out and now that there's a production company involved it's changed again but the spine of the story hasn't changed since that first draft.
DtS: Further on your method. Aside from your three day bender with Onward, what has been your process?
DB: It depends on the circumstances. If I've been hired to write something I'm not at liberty to be as wild with it so it becomes a lot more about craft, I'll do 5 pages a day and I want each page to be really tight.
If I'm writing a spec it's really more about prep, the actual writing of the script doesn't take me that long, it's about the outlining and research, I will read about two or three books about what ever the subject matter is.
And there ends the interview with the talented Dan Benamor.
THE TAKE AWAY...
1) Getting out to LA sooner rather than later worked well for Dan. He took an internship and turned it into a development executive position within 12 months. Obviously everyone's journey is different, but if you feel that you're a procrastinator, possibly spurring yourself to make the move sooner rather than later could move your career faster for you.
2) Voice - is a very important element of screenwriting. I often talk about how voice is the sum of all the elements of your screenplay. If you nail all the smaller elements of your story your voice will come across as strong. Voice is also the way you write. Do you use short sentences, do you have a good sense of dark humour like Dan does. Are you able to write the fine detail that will make your script and the characters feel real like Dan's torturer who brings an ice-coffee and coaster to work with him every day?
3) Tracking Board Recommends is great at starting careers. Dan is a great case study for this. When you have a script that you feel is ready, send it to TBR. If it's not recommended then take their notes seriously and apply them. TBR has the power and contacts to get you representation.
4) Dealing with bad notes. Make it a discussion. Don't be blunt. Don't just say, no, I'm not going to do it. Voice your concerns about the note and give reasons why you think it wouldn't necessarily work. Most importantly - make it a dialogue - not you simply saying, no, not gonna do it.
5) Method - when writing a spec - outlining and working on your structure is critically important to the success of your script. The more intimately you know the framework of the screenplay you're about to write - the easier it will be to do the actual writing.
Dan is a screenwriter that recently exploded onto the scene with his screenplay Onward, Through The Night.
Onward, was selected as a Tracking Board Recommended script.
For anyone reading this that doesn't know what Tracking Board is - you need to check them out now.
Tracking Board Recommend is the highest accolade any burgeoning screenwriter can get.
As far as fast-tracking careers goes TBR is better than the Nicholl Fellowship.
Dan is a worthy recipient of that accolade.
He is also the writer of a highly polished thriller 'Initiation' out now on VOD on iTunes - and various other VOD platforms.
Here's a link to the film on US iTunes.
Here's a link to the film on Canadian iTunes
Here's a link to buy the film on youtube
Here's a link to the trailer for Initiation on youtube.
You should be able to find it on Amazon, Xbox, Sony PlayStation, Google Play, YouTube (for rental/purchase), and VUDU plus on most cable VOD providers.
DtS: So, after having made your first low budget feature straight out of film school, how did you come to move to LA?
DB: Honestly, it was all because of my buddy Kyle. He would call me every two weeks and say, when are we going? If it wasn't for him pushing me, I probably would have put it off for another year.
DtS: When did you arrive in LA?
DB: 2011.
DtS: Did you know anyone going into LA?
DB: My cousin.
DtS: How do you feel about LA?
DB: It's a great city. It depends on where you live. I lived in Hollywood at first, and that's a very dispiriting place to live. It's like a refugee camp. I've since moved to Burbank, and I love it there.
DtS: How did you get your fist job in the industry? I met you when you were working at NGN.
DB: Yeah, Nasser entertainment, NGN. I started as an intern, just doing coverage. Then I got hired as a development assistant. Then I got promoted, and eventually I was head of development.
DtS: How long did that take?
DB: It was really short. I had a really good rapport with the producers. We're talking maybe 6 months to a year.
DtS: How many films did you do there?
DB: I did thirteen movies in three years. We were pumping them out pretty good.
DtS: You have a very distinct voice in your writing. I talk about voice on the blog, and how it can carry a writer and carry a script. Your voice is very unique. Can you talk about your voice for a moment, how did you create your style?
DB: I was in a weird mental place when I wrote Onward, I had just gotten engaged, and I had left the job as the development exec', but I wasn't properly represented at that stage, I was sort of in this middle ground, and I had seen the money I could make there, and realised that unless I wrote something that changed things significantly for me, I was going to be earning less than I wanted to be.
So I went to this hotel, and I wrote the first draft really quickly and I chose to not second guess any of my decisions. I wrote it with anger, I think. I think that most of the stuff I have written has been done so with some element of anger.
DtS: You have a very noir tone to your writing. You have super short, blunt sentences. Where does that writing style come from?
DB: Part of the reason I left my old job, I had written a script under a pen name, and we got Michelle McLaren interested in it, who did more episodes of Breaking Bad than anyone, before she completely blew-up, she read my script, met with us, and she said that the thing she took away from it the most was the sense of humour.
But that was kinda weird, as it was a violent, noir script. I've noticed that most of my scripts that resonate with people has had a lot of dark humour, which prevents it from being too dark. And I think it's also my own sensibilities.
In Onward, there's a scene where there's this guy who's a torturer, and he has an ice-coffee that he brings with him to each torture session and he had a coaster, cause to me, you see, films that often have these genre elements, tropes, they're not real people.
So I think to myself, he's a real guy, that's his job, he goes to work and tortures people, and so little things and little moments like that end up being really important to me, and I think they're all about voice, they're not about story. I always try to approach it, like, even bad people are still people, they're not cartoon characters.
DtS: Onward is the script that has done things for you.
DB: Yeah, It got me representation, manager, agent, lawyer.
DtS: This has all come from the Tracking Board Recommends?
DB: I've gotta give them a ton of credit. It has made a huge difference for my career.
DtS: How is the process of working with a good production company on this script compared to what you've experienced perviously?
DB: When you're making an independent film it's all about, let's go make the movie. When you're working with a company like Anonymous Content, the bar for the quality of material is really high. They are also, sooooo smart. It forces me to be on my A game.
DtS: Dealing with notes. Have you received notes you don't agree with? And if so, how do you deal with that?
DB: I'm working with people that are incredibly accomplished and so smart -
DtS: So you haven't been hit with a note that you thought - well that's just stupid -
DB: No, definitely not.
DtS: As a writer, getting bad notes from other projects, how did you deal with it?
DB: I think that because I was a development exec, I've seen both sides of the table. So when a producer gives me a note I know that they're not just saying it for fun, that there's a reason behind it. If it's something I disagree with it's a conversation.
I say, well if I do that, then this is what the domino effect of that will be, and this would be my concern, and then it becomes a conversation and we figure it out. I think that having been a development exec has been super helpful with that.
DtS: Initiation, your film that's just come out on VOD. When did you write it?
DB: About three years ago. My cousin had a script, I ended up coming in and co-writing the script with him.
DtS: How was the co-writing process?
DB: We had a really good working experience together. My cousin brought some great things to the table. He thinks outside the box and it was great. His background is more visual than mine, and he brought things up that I would never have thought about.
As writers we tend to think of the internal workings of the script - the elegance of the structure, themes, arcs, metaphors etc, and for me I'm always trying to bring emotion to everything I'm working on, but with my cousin he thinks how all that is going to be conveyed visually, which is something that writers often forget about. For me, it's all about trying to create an emotional connection between the story and the audience.
DtS: Do you go into a screenplay thinking how can I create a vicarious connection between the audience and my script? Or is that something that you feel is second nature to you?
DB: When I sit down to write, I think, if I was going to read this, why would I give a shit? And I try to set the bar on that relatively high.
Unfortunately, I think we are so numb to stories, that now they have to be so intense or otherwise we just don't care. I'm a horrible audience member. I try to watch a movie now and it's often a disaster, if it's not awesome, after 20 minutes, I'm out.
DtS: Back on your writing process. You said you locked yourself in a motel room and wrote Onward, how long was that?
DB: The first draft was three days. Then I did a couple more drafts before I sent it to anyone. Once the script got the recommend and then I got representation, we changed the script significantly before it was sent out and now that there's a production company involved it's changed again but the spine of the story hasn't changed since that first draft.
DtS: Further on your method. Aside from your three day bender with Onward, what has been your process?
DB: It depends on the circumstances. If I've been hired to write something I'm not at liberty to be as wild with it so it becomes a lot more about craft, I'll do 5 pages a day and I want each page to be really tight.
If I'm writing a spec it's really more about prep, the actual writing of the script doesn't take me that long, it's about the outlining and research, I will read about two or three books about what ever the subject matter is.
And there ends the interview with the talented Dan Benamor.
THE TAKE AWAY...
1) Getting out to LA sooner rather than later worked well for Dan. He took an internship and turned it into a development executive position within 12 months. Obviously everyone's journey is different, but if you feel that you're a procrastinator, possibly spurring yourself to make the move sooner rather than later could move your career faster for you.
2) Voice - is a very important element of screenwriting. I often talk about how voice is the sum of all the elements of your screenplay. If you nail all the smaller elements of your story your voice will come across as strong. Voice is also the way you write. Do you use short sentences, do you have a good sense of dark humour like Dan does. Are you able to write the fine detail that will make your script and the characters feel real like Dan's torturer who brings an ice-coffee and coaster to work with him every day?
3) Tracking Board Recommends is great at starting careers. Dan is a great case study for this. When you have a script that you feel is ready, send it to TBR. If it's not recommended then take their notes seriously and apply them. TBR has the power and contacts to get you representation.
4) Dealing with bad notes. Make it a discussion. Don't be blunt. Don't just say, no, I'm not going to do it. Voice your concerns about the note and give reasons why you think it wouldn't necessarily work. Most importantly - make it a dialogue - not you simply saying, no, not gonna do it.
5) Method - when writing a spec - outlining and working on your structure is critically important to the success of your script. The more intimately you know the framework of the screenplay you're about to write - the easier it will be to do the actual writing.
Tuesday, 16 August 2016
INTERVIEW - DAN BENAMOR Writer/Director/Producer - PART 1
Today's post is an interview with Dan Benamor.
Dan is a screenwriter that recently exploded onto the scene with his screenplay Onward, Through The Night.
Onward, was selected as a Tracking Board Recommended script.
For anyone reading this that doesn't know what Tracking Board is - you need to check them out now.
Tracking Board Recommend is the highest accolade any burgeoning screenwriter can get.
As far as fast tracking careers goes TBR is better than the Nicholl Fellowship.
Dan is a worthy recipient of that accolade.
He is also the writer of a highly polished thriller 'Initiation' out now on VOD on iTunes - and various other VOD platforms.
Here's a link to the film on US iTunes.
Here's a link to the film on Canadian iTunes
Here's a link to buy the film on youtube
Here's a link to the trailer for Initiation on youtube.
You should be able to find it on Amazon, Xbox, Sony PlayStation, Google Play, YouTube (for rental/purchase), and VUDU plus on most cable VOD providers.
Today I had the pleasure and privilege of speaking with Dan about his path from Baltimore to Los Angeles and his rise as a writer.
DtS: Let's rewind, take it from the start, where are you from?
DB: I'm from Baltimore. I always liked writing as a kid. I was going to be a novelist. Actually, when I just went home this weekend, my mom pulled out all this stuff I had written, I had eight of these children's books I was reading the I was young, and I had written mini books of my own, so I was writing while I was a little kid, and then I decided it was an unrealistic occupation
DtS: At what age did you realise writing was not economically viable as a career?
DB: Middle school, twelve or thirteen.
DtS: So you were already thinking about careers at that stage?
DB: Yeah, I grew up an old man. I'm still waiting for body to catch up to my mental age. (laughs) So basically what happened, I was going to be a psychotherapist, I was really into it, I have a degree in psychology, and I realised I was not going to be happy as a psychotherapist.
Once I got more into studying it, I realised, I'm too emotionally alive, it would be hard for me to disassociate and have the distance you need to be a good psychotherapist.
So, I saw this movie that, man, I always feel bad referencing it, because the guy that wrote it also wrote Nightcrawler which is an awesome film.
DtS: Dan Gilroy.
DB: Yeah, so I know that guy's a good writer, but there's this movie called Two For the Money, and I saw that at a movie theatre and I was like, there's no way that I can't come up with something that's better than this.
I think that sort of thing happens to all writers. But then you go through and you find out that the original script was probably good.
DtS: Did you ever see the first script for Yes Man? The first script was great, then the film turned out really badly. Nothing like the original script.
DB: I figured out how that can happen through my career. And we'll get there -- but what happened was I started writing screenplays, I bought a book called Screen Writing for Dummies, and I just started writing screenplays.
And I just kept writing them and I got onto a site called Trigger-street which taught me a lot about screen writing. At that stage I was still full on studying psychology, screenwriting was just something on the side.
DtS: What pushed you over the edge into film?
DB: I was reading script magazine and they had a scholarship to Vancouver film school. So I sent off a sample of my writing and I got a partial scholarship about 5 thousand bucks or something and it was like a one year program, so I ended up going up to film school, that really was the choice that sent me on this path.
While I was there I think I did about six or seven short films, as a writer, and then I directed a feature film right out of film school, with no money, just with film school buddies and stuff, and then I moved to LA and it snow balled from there.
DtS: Were you surrounded by cinephiles growing up?
DB: No. No one around me was into film that much. You know, Maryland doesn't really have a big film culture, I grew up in Baltimore which is very blue collar.
DtS: My understanding of Baltimore comes from The Wire.
DB: There's like three blocks in Baltimore where the story of The Wire takes place.
DtS: How was moving away from Baltimore up to Vancouver, did that culture your desire to make films or did it freak you out?
DB: My experience was great, I was surrounded by people who loved film. For me it was an extreme comfort level, we're all speaking the same language. That only made it more fun for me and more exciting.
DtS: The transition from Baltimore to LA. When did that happen?
DB: I made my first movie Betrayed, right after film school, then my visa expired in Canada so I came back to America. And I spent six months editing the movie, I would sneak into my university's lab and edit in there because they had Final Cut, then when the movie was done, there was nothing keeping me in Baltimore.
DtS: You won a gold Remi for that film at the Houston World Fest, right?
DB: Yeah.
DtS: Congrats on that, first one out the gate. What was the budget on that?
DB: In all seriousness, it was like, $4400 USD.
DtS: How'd you get your talent?
DB: Vancouver has a thriving scene. They film a lot of stuff in Vancouver. And also I was affiliated with the film school. So, through just asking around, we ended up doing a couple of days of casting and we found actors.
DtS: Were they all unknowns at the time? Or were there many people that had much experience?
DB: They were all unknown, but they had all worked, they were experienced actors, they weren't names or anything.
DtS: Did you make any short films before you stepped up to a feature?
DB: I did like six of them. Anytime anyone would ask me for help with a short film, I was like, no problem, I'll write it. I also ended up directing three shorts also.
DtS: I kinda hate short films in general. How do you feel about short films?
DB: The thing is, now it's so easy to make a feature. You hear people talking, like, they made a 20 minute short and they spent ten grand on it, I just say, take that ten grand go make a feature.
It takes a little more to stretch the dollar, but, there's nothing stopping you from doing it, I mean, anyone can go make a feature today.
DtS: How much did you learn from making your first feature?
DB: Loads. But it's a continuing education. That's one of the reasons I'm so happy I worked as a development executive. I got to see so many scripts written then filmed.
Every single time you do it, you learn something new. It's so different from the page versus when it's on the screen. We, as writers love writing dialogue, but we can over write it 'cause it's fun to do and easy, but when you put it up on screen everything is so obvious, so when you over write it's really clear what you're doing.
That's the biggest thing I've learned from seeing things I've worked on be made. We have a tendency as writers to show off, with dialogue and different kind of things, but that stuff is blindingly obvious when you film it.
The people we write for is not the audience, in a weird way, when you get into the process of making the movie everything changes.
The initial script that we write is really for the reader. And that reader is whatever, a producer, agent, manager, and they're extremely savvy about it. So ever more so, any of that stuff, if you over write it, these readers are going to pick it up immediately.
DtS: How did your first movie play at festivals?
DB: Great. So we made that film for $4400, but I didn't know, through my own ignorance, you have to get something called errors and omissions insurance.
We had a distributor interested in distributing it, but they needed this insurance which was going to cost almost the entire budget of the film again.
And I just didn't have the money. It played at World Fest Houston. I went there with some of my cast and my producer and that was cool, it made it a worthwhile thing.
The main thing I took from it, if I was going to do another low budget feature, and I'd say this to anyone out there thinking of doing a low budget feature, I'd spend a little more time raising money and try to do it for, you know, 20 grand, or something then you have a little more flex.
DtS: Did you find it easy to wrangle that film at such a low budget?
DB: I was lucky. I did it under the umbrella of having just graduated film school. The majority of the people who worked on my movie knew me from a previous project we had worked on.
DtS: Were you the only one in your school with a feature script ready to roll?
DB: No, there were others. But I think it was my gung-ho attitude that got people onboard. Looking back, truthfully if I had to do it again today, I don't think I could do it. I had a ton of help and a big cast and crew with me, but I was just a possessed person, I refused to give up once I had started.
Well leave the interview there for this post.We're halfway through.
In the next post I talk with Dan about his success with managers, signing with an agency, assignment writing, and his feature film Initiation.
For now - let's look at the TAKE AWAY.
There's two main points I want to highlight from this part of the interview.
LEARNING BY DOING.
Here's a link to the film on US iTunes.
Here's a link to the film on Canadian iTunes
Here's a link to the trailer for Initiation on youtube.
You should be able to find it on Amazon, Xbox, Sony PlayStation, Google Play, YouTube (for rental/purchase), and VUDU plus on most cable VOD providers.
Dan is a screenwriter that recently exploded onto the scene with his screenplay Onward, Through The Night.
Onward, was selected as a Tracking Board Recommended script.
For anyone reading this that doesn't know what Tracking Board is - you need to check them out now.
Tracking Board Recommend is the highest accolade any burgeoning screenwriter can get.
As far as fast tracking careers goes TBR is better than the Nicholl Fellowship.
Dan is a worthy recipient of that accolade.
He is also the writer of a highly polished thriller 'Initiation' out now on VOD on iTunes - and various other VOD platforms.
Here's a link to the film on US iTunes.
Here's a link to the film on Canadian iTunes
Here's a link to buy the film on youtube
Here's a link to the trailer for Initiation on youtube.
You should be able to find it on Amazon, Xbox, Sony PlayStation, Google Play, YouTube (for rental/purchase), and VUDU plus on most cable VOD providers.
Today I had the pleasure and privilege of speaking with Dan about his path from Baltimore to Los Angeles and his rise as a writer.
DtS: Let's rewind, take it from the start, where are you from?
DB: I'm from Baltimore. I always liked writing as a kid. I was going to be a novelist. Actually, when I just went home this weekend, my mom pulled out all this stuff I had written, I had eight of these children's books I was reading the I was young, and I had written mini books of my own, so I was writing while I was a little kid, and then I decided it was an unrealistic occupation
DtS: At what age did you realise writing was not economically viable as a career?
DB: Middle school, twelve or thirteen.
DtS: So you were already thinking about careers at that stage?
DB: Yeah, I grew up an old man. I'm still waiting for body to catch up to my mental age. (laughs) So basically what happened, I was going to be a psychotherapist, I was really into it, I have a degree in psychology, and I realised I was not going to be happy as a psychotherapist.
Once I got more into studying it, I realised, I'm too emotionally alive, it would be hard for me to disassociate and have the distance you need to be a good psychotherapist.
So, I saw this movie that, man, I always feel bad referencing it, because the guy that wrote it also wrote Nightcrawler which is an awesome film.
DtS: Dan Gilroy.
DB: Yeah, so I know that guy's a good writer, but there's this movie called Two For the Money, and I saw that at a movie theatre and I was like, there's no way that I can't come up with something that's better than this.
I think that sort of thing happens to all writers. But then you go through and you find out that the original script was probably good.
DtS: Did you ever see the first script for Yes Man? The first script was great, then the film turned out really badly. Nothing like the original script.
DB: I figured out how that can happen through my career. And we'll get there -- but what happened was I started writing screenplays, I bought a book called Screen Writing for Dummies, and I just started writing screenplays.
And I just kept writing them and I got onto a site called Trigger-street which taught me a lot about screen writing. At that stage I was still full on studying psychology, screenwriting was just something on the side.
DtS: What pushed you over the edge into film?
DB: I was reading script magazine and they had a scholarship to Vancouver film school. So I sent off a sample of my writing and I got a partial scholarship about 5 thousand bucks or something and it was like a one year program, so I ended up going up to film school, that really was the choice that sent me on this path.
While I was there I think I did about six or seven short films, as a writer, and then I directed a feature film right out of film school, with no money, just with film school buddies and stuff, and then I moved to LA and it snow balled from there.
DtS: Were you surrounded by cinephiles growing up?
DB: No. No one around me was into film that much. You know, Maryland doesn't really have a big film culture, I grew up in Baltimore which is very blue collar.
DtS: My understanding of Baltimore comes from The Wire.
DB: There's like three blocks in Baltimore where the story of The Wire takes place.
DtS: How was moving away from Baltimore up to Vancouver, did that culture your desire to make films or did it freak you out?
DB: My experience was great, I was surrounded by people who loved film. For me it was an extreme comfort level, we're all speaking the same language. That only made it more fun for me and more exciting.
DtS: The transition from Baltimore to LA. When did that happen?
DB: I made my first movie Betrayed, right after film school, then my visa expired in Canada so I came back to America. And I spent six months editing the movie, I would sneak into my university's lab and edit in there because they had Final Cut, then when the movie was done, there was nothing keeping me in Baltimore.
DtS: You won a gold Remi for that film at the Houston World Fest, right?
DB: Yeah.
DtS: Congrats on that, first one out the gate. What was the budget on that?
DB: In all seriousness, it was like, $4400 USD.
DtS: How'd you get your talent?
DB: Vancouver has a thriving scene. They film a lot of stuff in Vancouver. And also I was affiliated with the film school. So, through just asking around, we ended up doing a couple of days of casting and we found actors.
DtS: Were they all unknowns at the time? Or were there many people that had much experience?
DB: They were all unknown, but they had all worked, they were experienced actors, they weren't names or anything.
DtS: Did you make any short films before you stepped up to a feature?
DB: I did like six of them. Anytime anyone would ask me for help with a short film, I was like, no problem, I'll write it. I also ended up directing three shorts also.
DtS: I kinda hate short films in general. How do you feel about short films?
DB: The thing is, now it's so easy to make a feature. You hear people talking, like, they made a 20 minute short and they spent ten grand on it, I just say, take that ten grand go make a feature.
It takes a little more to stretch the dollar, but, there's nothing stopping you from doing it, I mean, anyone can go make a feature today.
DtS: How much did you learn from making your first feature?
DB: Loads. But it's a continuing education. That's one of the reasons I'm so happy I worked as a development executive. I got to see so many scripts written then filmed.
Every single time you do it, you learn something new. It's so different from the page versus when it's on the screen. We, as writers love writing dialogue, but we can over write it 'cause it's fun to do and easy, but when you put it up on screen everything is so obvious, so when you over write it's really clear what you're doing.
That's the biggest thing I've learned from seeing things I've worked on be made. We have a tendency as writers to show off, with dialogue and different kind of things, but that stuff is blindingly obvious when you film it.
The people we write for is not the audience, in a weird way, when you get into the process of making the movie everything changes.
The initial script that we write is really for the reader. And that reader is whatever, a producer, agent, manager, and they're extremely savvy about it. So ever more so, any of that stuff, if you over write it, these readers are going to pick it up immediately.
DtS: How did your first movie play at festivals?
DB: Great. So we made that film for $4400, but I didn't know, through my own ignorance, you have to get something called errors and omissions insurance.
We had a distributor interested in distributing it, but they needed this insurance which was going to cost almost the entire budget of the film again.
And I just didn't have the money. It played at World Fest Houston. I went there with some of my cast and my producer and that was cool, it made it a worthwhile thing.
The main thing I took from it, if I was going to do another low budget feature, and I'd say this to anyone out there thinking of doing a low budget feature, I'd spend a little more time raising money and try to do it for, you know, 20 grand, or something then you have a little more flex.
DtS: Did you find it easy to wrangle that film at such a low budget?
DB: I was lucky. I did it under the umbrella of having just graduated film school. The majority of the people who worked on my movie knew me from a previous project we had worked on.
DtS: Were you the only one in your school with a feature script ready to roll?
DB: No, there were others. But I think it was my gung-ho attitude that got people onboard. Looking back, truthfully if I had to do it again today, I don't think I could do it. I had a ton of help and a big cast and crew with me, but I was just a possessed person, I refused to give up once I had started.
Well leave the interview there for this post.We're halfway through.
In the next post I talk with Dan about his success with managers, signing with an agency, assignment writing, and his feature film Initiation.
For now - let's look at the TAKE AWAY.
There's two main points I want to highlight from this part of the interview.
LEARNING BY DOING.
Dan talks about how much he learnt from being a development executive. He found it incredibly helpful being on the development side of things and seeing a screenplay go through re-write after re-write, until it finally got made into a film.
Seeing the difference between what was written on the page and how that played on the screen is a really important lesson to learn.
We can get tied up in writing, and forget that ultimately what we're writing isn't writing at all. We're really writing a blue print for a visual film.
As writers we need to step back and acknowledge that, then learn how to best write for the final medium, not the written form.
MAKE A FILM
Attending film school was a great boost for Dan's writing and his career. Making a feature film right out of the gate, a low budget feature is a great way to learn.
We, as writers, need to remember that writing is only part of the film making process. The more you, as a writer, understand about each and every aspect of that process, the better equipped you are to write the blue print for a successful film.
You don't need a million dollars to make a feature film. Now days, making a feature film becomes more and more accessible.
If you can get $10k together you can make a feature. It won't be the greatest film ever made, but you shouldn't look at it like that. You should look at that 10k as an investment in your career. It's probably the best 10k you can spend.
Also, when you have a produced feature credit to your name, people start to take you more seriously. Even if that film only plays at film festivals and doesn't secure distribution.
It shows that you're serious about the craft. There are literally tens of thousands of writers vying for only hundreds of writing assignments. The more you can do to help yourself stand out the better. And one of the best ways to do that is to make a low budget feature.
Check out Dan's feature film Initiation.
Here's a link to the film on US iTunes.
Here's a link to the film on Canadian iTunes
Here's a link to the trailer for Initiation on youtube.
You should be able to find it on Amazon, Xbox, Sony PlayStation, Google Play, YouTube (for rental/purchase), and VUDU plus on most cable VOD providers.
More from the interview with Dan coming soon.
Oh, also, interesting side note and why you should pay attention to what Dan has to say - he is a long time reader for the Austin Screenplay Festival.
Austin Screenplay Festival is one of the top tier screenplay fests in America. In fact, in the world. It ranks up there with the Nicholl Fellowship and The Page Awards.
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